tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post2097574581523397999..comments2024-03-28T13:47:00.644+00:00Comments on Bruce Charlton's Notions: My Arkle Introduction - a request for commentsBruce Charltonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09615189090601688535noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-19621948422954546642019-09-12T15:48:42.653+01:002019-09-12T15:48:42.653+01:00Thanks Very Much to everybody for their help with ...Thanks Very Much to everybody for their help with this - including those who sent corrections via e-mail. I shall now embark on doing the revisions. Bruce Charltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09615189090601688535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-85633420357547048222019-09-11T23:00:22.108+01:002019-09-11T23:00:22.108+01:00Bruce: I read your introduction with interest. As...Bruce: I read your introduction with interest. As you solicited comment, I've sent a (very light) markup to your e-mail.Howard Ramsey Sutherlandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07629291516927002384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-33158650034588089562019-09-11T21:59:16.494+01:002019-09-11T21:59:16.494+01:00@Francis - Thank you for this, great stuff.
@Francis - Thank you for this, great stuff. <br /><br />Bruce Charltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09615189090601688535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-89731065091680692082019-09-11T20:17:50.082+01:002019-09-11T20:17:50.082+01:00Great introduction! Unfortunately, I did not have ...Great introduction! Unfortunately, I did not have the time to give it a thorough reading today, but I will do so tomorrow (with fresh eyes). <br /><br />I did notice one small error - a superfluous word in the last sentence of the "Growing-up to become deities - reincarnation" part. <br /><br />The sentence reads "But why does God want us to do go through all this prolonged process?"<br /><br />"do" seems unnecessary here - perhaps "all" could be omitted as well. <br /><br />Francis Bergerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11063224017320651978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-89364331922259806672019-09-11T20:00:42.189+01:002019-09-11T20:00:42.189+01:00@Otto - Noted, thank you. @Otto - Noted, thank you. Bruce Charltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09615189090601688535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-25423581034296303322019-09-11T18:57:06.736+01:002019-09-11T18:57:06.736+01:00" William Blake, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Owe..." William Blake, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Owen Barfield, CS Lewis and JRR Tolkien in England; Goethe, Novalis and Rudolf Steiner in Germany; and Ralph Waldo Emerson, Henry David Thoreau and Walt Whitman in the United States."<br /><br />If you include their first names, you should also write Goethe fully as Johann Wolfgang von Goethe, as he stands out for no reason.<br /><br />"and he actually lived in accordance with his ideas optimism and positivity to a much greater extent than most people achieve"<br /><br />"ideas" or "ideals"? Either way, the correction should be "idea[s/ls] <b>of</b> optimism and positivity to a ..." or using em-dashes "idea[s/ls]<b>—</b> optimism and positivity <b>—</b> to a ..."Ottonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-83334167299401127512019-09-11T18:33:33.637+01:002019-09-11T18:33:33.637+01:00@Wm - Thanks, that's useful.@Wm - Thanks, that's useful. Bruce Charltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09615189090601688535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-61448142550148274352019-09-11T18:09:54.955+01:002019-09-11T18:09:54.955+01:00Paragraph 2 "As a spiritual philosopher I see...Paragraph 2 "As a spiritual philosopher I see Arkle as..." -- I think you mean to call Arkle, not yourself, a spiritual philosopher, so this should be reworded. Something like "I believe that as a spiritual philosopher, Arkle is...Wm Jas Tychonievichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07446790072877463982noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-91824479929823594692019-09-11T16:27:46.585+01:002019-09-11T16:27:46.585+01:00@John - Thanks for that!@John - Thanks for that!Bruce Charltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09615189090601688535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4683970826895755480.post-5680641714316319162019-09-11T15:32:46.789+01:002019-09-11T15:32:46.789+01:00Paragraph 15 wording in parenthesis seems duplicat...Paragraph 15 wording in parenthesis seems duplicated. Should read "created and hosted"?<br />Even so, things did not really get-going until 2008, some thirty years after that first encounter; when I discovered extensive web pages (hosted created and hosted by Michael Perry) <br /><br />Wonderful clear introduction. John Vienoreply@blogger.com